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7 Lines Meme

Ganked from the wonderful flowsoffire... Go to the seventh page of your work-in-progress and post seven lines from it. You're also supposed to then tag seven friends to do the same thing, but I don't have that many friends. (Joke! Joke! I just hate tagging people for memes.)

What a cool idea! I don't really talk about what I'm working on with anyone, so it's kind of fun to post a few lines of these things that are consuming my mind at the moment. I just wish what I had was more interesting. I see all of these excerpts with these deep, meaningful moments, expressive descriptions, and character explorations, and then I post my few lines of whatever adventure I have, and it seems so... banal. Well, hopefully they'll be fun at least.

I'm actually posting two. The first is from one of the things I'll be posting very soon. It was actually all done, and then I decided to make a major change in one of the characters and had to rewrite the entire thing. The second is something that I've partially outlined and written, but haven't worked on in a while.



Excerpt 1:

Being a clone of the man came in handy: they were the same height and he didn't need to reach high like Jenny had. He placed his fingers carefully on the Doctor's temples, the same way he had done it when he'd played a similar scene out with Sophia Myles' Reinette.

Immediately, he felt a tighter connection with the Doctor, and he sensed the mental barrier in front of him. From a distance, he heard the Doctor say, "I doubt I need to give you any instruction. Push firmly and tell me what concept I'm thinking of." David took a deep breath, focused his mind through the link between himself and the Doctor, and pushed hard.

Jenny saw the Doctor's body jerk, his face spasming as if in sudden pain, and she wondered if that's what he'd done when she'd tried. She stepped to the side to look at David and gasped: his eyes were shining bright gold.


Excerpt 2:

What did he remember about Donna? They had been wandering through a park in Chiswick to help her recover from a harrowing visit to the planet Lilpaness. Before that… The Doctor hunched forward, his hands over his nose and mouth, trying to concentrate on the memories and the timeline. Many adventures with her, big and small, floated through his mind, though they almost felt like stories that someone else had told him, and when he tried to concentrate on them, far stronger memories of them, from this new timeline and not involving Donna, intruded. There was that investigation into Adipose Industries, with Penny, who'd complained the entire time after he'd loosed her from the chair and then pulled her into the supply closet with him when he'd gone after the main computer core. When it was all over, she couldn't run off fast enough.

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flowsoffire
Jun. 23rd, 2015 07:51 pm (UTC)
Very interesting bits! I love the sound of those :D

I see all of these excerpts with these deep, meaningful moments, expressive descriptions, and character explorations, and then I post my few lines of whatever adventure I have
Oh dear, that sounds like a typical case of writers-never-happy XD I just cracked up when I read this line, because for instance, I do a lot of descriptive, insightful stuff and just basically catching moments, but I would give a lot to improve on actual plotty things and adventures like you do them, that are at the same time solid and engaging, psychologically revealing, and well-written. I just feel like my stuff is scattered bits and I can't create anything that's deep and solid. We could totally switch but I'd bet you anything we'd still be unsatisfied at the end of the day. XD
shivver13
Jun. 25th, 2015 05:32 pm (UTC)
Oh, absolutely. It's like hair: curly-haired people want straight hair, and straight-haired people (like me) want curly hair. :) Only thing we can do is continue working on the things we want to be able to do.
flowsoffire
Jun. 28th, 2015 08:34 pm (UTC)
Haha, very true—the parallel sums it up really :D
a_phoenixdragon
Jun. 26th, 2015 02:44 am (UTC)
WOW!! Okay - definitely wanting more of these two!! So...hanging in suspense here, lol!!

*HUGS*
shivver13
Jun. 26th, 2015 03:46 am (UTC)
Why, thank you! The first is already up - it's called "Discovery". The second will be a while. It'll be a multi-chapter, as it's a rather long adventure.
a_phoenixdragon
Jul. 4th, 2015 04:57 pm (UTC)
Saw and saved to read!! *Bounces*
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